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Marlene
This is a very easy to follow story with a simple moral of dont let anyone drag you down to their level, I think. There is one thing missing and that is discerning character traits, is Juan particularly shy and timid, did he have friends as a kid, what makes his friends different from him and each other? Are his friends lazy and out going, or do they only come to him for help when they need it and only then. Does Juan get mad on the inside but not say anything? How do his friends treat each other? Why does he stay? What do they like or dislike? I like the concept and the art style but it does lack what makes it personal to the audience. Either way, good job, you guys have a pretty solid story structure, you guys just have to fill in the little details.
Gael
The story is good but needs a moral other than that cool story!
Roman
I like how juan finally does the right thing and abandons his bad friends
Hazel
Nice story!
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Final Storyreel Juan Jose Singh
Juan Jose Singh's friends are not supportive. Will he realize that they are not good friends?
This is where the special thanks would go! I’m assuming they will be a little longer this week, therefore, I designed extra space for them. If there is far more description and special thanks then there is space, this entire box becomes scrollable.
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Gerson, Jobanjit, Jose, Melanie
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