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Erika
Hey Bro HamCam! Very interesting story. The twist that Roswell was planning on betraying Fuga was totally on point, and his willingness to sacrifice himself for Holly in the end was touching. I especially like that he finally got to see the sunrise. It’s too bad that the sun’s rays couldn’t do anything to counteract the damage of the salt.
There are some things I think could be more clear to help the story feel smoother. Is Holly’s blindness relevant to her character? And why is she the only scientist willing to help any of the aliens? I also wonder if one of the aliens can teleport then why he was in captivity at all… Was he just pretending to be captured so he could help the others? Or maybe he has some sort of weakness like being allergic to sunlight, which made captivity a better option than trying to survive in hiding on the surface. It would be really fun to expand this story so you can fill in some of those gaps. Well done!
Manuela
Really liked the concept! the ending was definitely not what I expected but I enjoy it when that happens, great job guys!
Elle
It was heartbreaking to watch Fuga die right when he had made it out, but one of the parts I liked was actually that scene because of how it ended. Even though you killed off your main character, Fuga’s wants as a character still felt fulfilled in his eyes and I quite liked that. He was also able to give Holly another chance at life, which added a little bit of hope at the end.
The thing that was unclear to me was near the ending when Holly finds out Roswell’s plan. Even though a full play-by-play wouldn’t be necessary with this form of storytelling, it felt like there was some sort of explanation missing.
Good job!
Desiree
Awesome story!
Elizabeth
Fun story! Love the aliens. Not a very happy ending, but not all stories have those! Good job
Antonio
Hey! This is fun. I love the premise of an escape story of aliens. I would love to learn more about the different aliens and why Rosswell has an army. I would also like to know more about the female character and what is her motivation to engage with Fuga. Good rhythm!
Christian
Great job! There were some very creative ways to fit a very full story into only a few minutes. I think that the twist was great and it definitely brings a new meaning to Fuga's blood as a valuable resource.
Sarah
This was... *extremely* engaging! I loved every moment of it! I also appreciate how you didn't shy away from having a happy-not-so-happy ending! The story feels like you spent a ton of time on it, and it's been a rollercoaster of emotions experiencing Fuga's journey with him! I loved it! Keep up the great work!
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Searching for Sunlight
A lonely Alien sent to Area 51 joins other extra terrestrials on an escape mission out of the ruthless base.
Act I: Fuga is captured after a crash landing while en route to the sun and sent to a secret base in Japan. Fugas blood has a rare ability to reverse the effects of death. He meets another alien who informs him that he will soon be sent to a new location called area 51, located in the USA. Just before the alien dies, he gives Fuga a standard flash drive with specific instructions. Give to Roswell.
Act II: Upon entering Area 51, Fuga meets, and builds a connection with Holly, a blind human scientist. Holly takes Fuga to meet Roswell, the first alien captured on Earth. With the flash drive, Roswell is able to connect with his Army in space and an escape plan is set in motion. He introduces Fuga to other aliens a part of the plan.
Act III: The Escape Plan goes awry, turns out Roswell has secretly been planning a double-cross. He intends to destroy Earth and steal Fuga for his blood. Most of the Aliens escape, but Fuga and Holly are killed in the battle, Fuga sacrifices the rest of his blood to revive Holly, while the sun rises.
We'd like to thank everyone who provided us feedback as well as all of the wonderful content we got to enjoy. We're really happy to be here, we're just two guys from the underdog city of Philly, PA and we love creating stories and learning so much from each speaker. Pixar films were a huge part of our childhood and we were a part of that first generation that got to enjoy the films, so thanks to Pixar with extended special thanks to the Story Xperiential team, Pixar really does know how to build a creative, intelligent and hardworking team.
- Eric & Colin
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