Kim (1 like)

OMG your story has evolved in such an amazing way it's SO GREAT!!!! I LOVE the lost and found soul shelter -- it's part of what's very compelling to me about this story -- so many cool concepts that intrigued me and kept me in the story. I love that finding her dad is what brings back her creativity. It's such a sweet theme. Your story put a smile on my face thank you!

Jiwoo

Aww actually Soul Shelter is my favorite location as well! Glad that it made you smile ;) Thanks for your feedback!

Nova (1 like)

HaHAH! Excellent job, Jiwoo! I really admire how much you were able to rewrite from Week 7 to now. Hats off to everyone that helped with the voice actin’, too. And, wow! You’re great at figuring out what drawings are necessary to convey the story properly. If it were me, I’d probably have told half as much in five times the number of pictures.

Gotta admit, you had me worried for a second—I was real scared the dad was ‘boutta get isekai-ed by that car at the beginning. But, no—him going into the Lost and Found City to search for the pencil his daughter gifted him was a great touch—super clever way to tie things together. And AGH—that dark laptop screen transition was so smart; there’s no face more telling than the face you make at your screen when you’re alone—it instantly coneys how distraught Stella is.

Now, choosing Mr. Harper, their stress-inducing employer, to be the thing that begins sparking his memory is hilarious, don’t get me wrong—but there’s also a part of me that wishes there were a few more things relevant to their relationship and memories with one another—good times as well as bad. So, if you were to ever revisit this, I’d keep that in, but I’d also add in a few other hints here and there. Like, I wish we could’ve gotten more out of the Lost and Found hotel—your idea about it being where physical items go when they’re lost is wonderful, and I’d’ve really liked to see it included (completely understand why you left it out tho—we didn’t have much time). Another thing I would’ve liked to see included was more of the mom. One way I’d achieve that is I’d have her be one of the triggering memories. Two birds with one stone, y’know? Maybe we could even get three birds: Stella visits one of the hotel rooms full of her lost belongings. She finds something that her mom gave her when she was little. Both she and her dad (currently Mr. Lost) start reminiscing about it. Stella’s all “wait a sec how come you know ‘bout that, too?”

Real quick, something I was curious about—when they’re searching for Stella’s creativity, and Mr. Lost draws the search console, does he have to redraw it after every single use? Like, is it just poofin’ away each time Stella messes up her query? While we’re at it, how long do his creations stick around? Only up until they’ve fulfilled their purpose? Last thing, how old is Stella before and after her dad goes missing? Since, she’s at least old enough to work afterwards.

Anyways, once again, superb work. You did a fantastic job tying up all of the loose ends for a satisfying ending, and everything was quite well-thought out. I’ll be watchin’ to see what you accomplish in the future—you’re goin’ places!

Jiwoo (1 like)

Ahhhh Nova! Your comments are always so interesting and pleasing to read ;D
I agree with the voice acting, I was so amazed by how they've exactly expressed my intentions! And about the drawings, I'm so relieved it was enough --frankly, I was running out of time 😂 I love your suggestion about using more of the hotel concept and adding some happy memories! For now, I'm not quite sure whether i'd be working on this project further, but once I take enough break, I know I'll come back at some point ;)

For some more details, yes the console has to be redrawn every time as Mr. Lost's power is not strong enough -- he's a basic pencil, I guess if he had been a pen, it might have last longer than one time use -- and that's why he was getting minutely shorter every time a new console was appearing. And Stella was 4-6 when she was gone, and now she is something around 13-15.

Lastly! Thanks soooo much for giving me great feedback and encouraging me! Without it, Stella would've reunited with her dad😉

Enkhee (1 like)

Hey,
I enjoyed your story reel and how it turned. And can I suggest to you one thing that the father's job was to write an article about the lost and found city. So he accidentally spent too much time and got lost in it. The daughter, at her tern age, starts to investigate her dad's disappearance and finds the city. So they do not knowingly together on a search through the city. Time is almost up, the girl sits and cries helplessly. And tells one last story that she remembers which is about her dad. At this moment the pencil realizes that she was looking for her all this time. How about this?
So good luck with your future projects! And best of luck!

Jiwoo

Hi Enkhee! Wowww I totally love the idea that Mr. Cassidy was lost in the process of exploring the city for his article! Thanks for suggestion ;)

Samuel (1 like)

It has a good amount of emotional moments that make it engaging and the use of music is good too. It’s creative and the frames are well done too

Jiwoo

Hey Samuel, I'm so relieved to hear that! I was actually very concerned about emotional build-ups😅 Thanks for your appreciation!

Julie (1 like)

I loved your story! Very creative and heartwarming in the end! Very well done!

Jiwoo

Thanks, Julie :) I'm so happy to hear that !

Ally (1 like)

I think your story is a fantastic journey, and I absolutely love the amount of creativity and heart behind it! It was so sweet how the bond between Mr. Lost and Stella grew over the course of the story, and it became an even more heartwarming when he turned out to be Stella’s father. That was such a great addition to the storyline! I loved the part where Stella asked, “Where is my creativity?” and the computer said, “Somewhere in the world.” That made me laugh! I think you did an amazing job on the artwork and editing, and I absolutely enjoyed your story :-)!

Jiwoo

Aww I'm so glad that you could bond with my work emotionally ;)
Thanks so much for enjoying it!