Colin

What I like about this story is it emphasizes a conflict that most creative people have with their parents at some point if they are more serious and/or strict types of people which is not seeing eye to eye on a lot of things. It seems as though Hart is very intelligent and cognizant of this at a young age which is a shame because he was not able to spend time with his father a lot a young age. Fathers can be really hard on their sons sometimes when they become more independent and start making decisions for themselves that their fathers may have not chosen to do. I also like how each of them is able to overcome adversity to get each other to appreciate one another.
- It all seems clear to me.
-The only suggestions that I have to make this story stronger would be (only if necessary) to give a little bit of a description to why Brane and Hart live hidden in the American suburbs. If this has nothing to do with the plot, then please ignore this. Otherwise, I do not have any suggestions to add.

Tomas (1 like)

I think it's a very concise story and I think that helps a lot to make it powerful and emotional, I feel like the narrator can be more of a character within the story so that everything feels connected and we can empathize more with the story you're telling.

Thank you very much for your work.

Francisco (1 like)

Really nice! I like the characters and the world you created. The story about the girl and dad is so moving. Well done. :)

Duane (1 like)

Story of my life! I grew up in a Steeltown! I was supposed to continue the cycle of working at the mills! I could draw very well as a kid! I dreamed of levitation above an old piano I discovered in our first house. All the way through high school my father’s only reply was;”That’s interesting, come go with me, I’ll get you a real job at the mills!” Anyway, Great job of telling an age old story!

Marijke (1 like)

What a sweet story and it has a good happy ending. I love thee characters and the expressiveness of the drawings. It makes me empathize. Confusing to me is why Hart hates the boarding school so. Is it because he would be away from his dad, or is it a horrible place? Or can he not pursue his art there? But overall great work!

Anastasia (1 like)

Lovely story reel! The use of greyscale versus color highlighted beautiful aspects of the story, which brought attention to supporting the moral of the story. (I also really like the choice of the moral too!) If you decide to revisit this piece, it would be fun to see snippets of Hart's drawings. :)

Jonathan (1 like)

Very nice :)

I’d love to see some solutions other than cross dissolves between shots, but otherwise awesome stuff!

Great work!

Lee (1 like)

This was so cute!!!! I really loved it. Very compelling and great art