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Benedict
I think the story lacked your audio narration, insted of just a sound playing. Plus, how did the town inhabitants get to glow, like what caused it?
Ella
Great job! I agree, your drawings are amazing and moral of the story was really good!
Harris
I think this story would be so much better if it had at east a little bit of dialogue you don't have to narrate the whole thing, but the occasional explanation would be great
Sanne
Great artwork!
Ethan
I really enjoy how you developed your character and how you built them up!! Though I wasn’t able to see to much about how their glowing affected the day to day lives i enjoyed the character’s development!
Seneca
Your idea is really interesting and has a really good moral
Chris
Hello! I loved that your story had a moral behind it, but it seemed to take a really long time to get to the point, with a lot of unnecessary difficulties to get past if you’re only purpose was to show a story about the positives of seeking help from others (such as the villagers glowing, which is an interesting idea but didn’t really add to the story). I feel like this would make a great book, or movie, but for a short film it was a lot to take in! The art was lovely, and its clear you put a lot of work into this project. Its amazing that you added colours as well!!! Overall it was very enjoyable to watch, and I wish your team all the best :)!
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Glow
Glow is a story about a boy named Lux, who lives in a village called Solis Villa. Everyone in Solis Villa has the ability to glow. Every day, Lux runs around the village trying to help people out with his home made gadgets! One day, when helping a girl get her cat out of a tree, an officer of the village stumbles upon one of Lux's gadgets. The officer uses the gadget against an umbra creature and when the invention works, he tries to find out who created it. Soon the officer and Lux are formally introduced, and because of that Lux's gadgets become extremely popular. Because his gadgets become popular and highly used, people ask for his help more often. Lux, sure that he could make all the gadgets on his own, avoided others help and continued to work on his gadgets. Because of that Lux overworked himself to the point of mental and physical exhaustion. One day, a particularly DIFFICULT villager asks for a gadget, and impatiently pesters Lux to the point where he snaps! Turning into an umbra creature himself! Trapped inside his mind, Lux tries to calm himself, but is unable too. Until, he hears the voice of his mom. Slowly he calms down, and returns to his normal self. Ever since that day, Lux has gained a team of people to help him build gadgets for the town, and has learned to say no and take breaks. The moral of the story is it's okay to seek help from others, and if you feel mentally and physically exhausted, take a break.
We would like to give a special thanks to Mr. Lacsina, for electing us for this amazing opportunity! We'd also like to thank our loving family and friends for supporting us through this internship. Thank you to Pixar, Xperiential, and the X-in-the-box team for teaching us new skills, and tools that we will use in the future. Lastly, we'd like to thank ourselves for getting this story done!
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Team:
Mila White and Erik Luis
Erik, Mila
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