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Ashton
I like the use of text.
Natalie
i love all the details! and the drawings!
Christian
Good story, good art too. I like the progression she goes through and the way the story concludes.
Lila
I like the moral!
David
I liked the drawing style of the main character, and how it contrasts with the rest of the world around her, showing her outcast qualities and differences. I was very confused at how the necklace got it's magic power, or if it even had magic power at all? It was very unclear if the necklace caused her to have the dream, or if it was just a normal dream? You never explained what her desire was? To have friends? To not have fake friends? I would suggest you give the character a main "want" so we can see what they are working towards.
Manea-Joy
Love how it was a dream and starts to except who she is as a person it’s super cool and I enjoyed every part of this story
Mónica
I like the moral of the story :)
Bryce
The moral and art is very good but (in my opinion) the start wasn’t necessary. Bu it did bring some type of tension to the movie which was interesting.
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TJ's Ultimate Desire
Desire. A word that involves CURIOSITY, TEMPTATION and sometimes can cause HAVOC. It is a strong want for something. Don't we all have desires? Look into the world of a girl who's ultimate desire caused her to really understand the true meaning of acceptance.
This is where the special thanks would go! I’m assuming they will be a little longer this week, therefore, I designed extra space for them. If there is far more description and special thanks then there is space, this entire box becomes scrollable.
Special Thanks:
Team:
Team Nanakuli Olelo - Hawaii
Destiny, Jaylee, Nalani, Treasure
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