Colin (1 like)

Nice story and good deatial

Mira (1 like)

I love the colors and the music! The narration felt really smooth and I liked it! One thing I would love to see would be more variety of artwork, maybe different angles. Overall though I think you did a great job!

Kaden (1 like)

I think the base idea for the story is great, and there is so much you can do with magic and music. A big problem though is I feel like there are a lot of gaps in the story and some things seemed to be forced in. It would also benefit the story to add more drawing, for example you spend the first minute and a half on basically the same sene. Other the those issues I think if you work on this more it could be amazing.

MacKenzie (1 like)

I love the idea and story! I think the frames are a bit repetitive though :D

Abigail (1 like)

I love the world you created! Music and magic being combined is very fun and there's a lot you can do with that. I also really like the idea of The Silence, however, I think the introduction to it could've been smoother. To me, it felt as though it was inserted in with not a lot of explanation, and I think that, had you expanded a bit on what it is, possibly by including some foreshadowing in the beginning, it would've felt a lot more natural. Good story!

Bryce (1 like)

The story is very good and character progression was also done pretty well. I’m a little confused on what “The Silence”. More clarity on the entity might increase the tension and stakes these characters have to face.

Braden (1 like)

The idea is amazing and the music makes it great! The Silence idea was a little unexpected, and I wish it were explained a little more. Otherwise, nice story!

Kylie (1 like)

I really like your submission, but I think you need more art work. I saw the same picture about 5 times, and I like seeing more art work to help tell a story.